Sewn Subdued
What do you think of my short poem?
Within the closet of my skull,
memories become dormant,
yet deadly- sewing invisible
threads into my cerebellum,
controlling every movement,
limiting courage.
But as time
rushes by,
memories gather debris-
subduing their power,
detaching strings,
as my venomous
memories tangle
and collapse.
I only wrote this in a few minutes before my softball game, so I know it needs a lot of work. So suggestions are definitely welcome.
No suggestions at all...It's VERY good!
It reminds me of a Sylvia Plath poem...or a Margaret Atwood poem.
Very unique.
If I had to rate it, I'd say 10/10!!!
=D
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